The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females across six different
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groups who engaged in regular physical activity in 2010.
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, a higher percentage of
women
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participated in regular physical activity than
men
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in almost all
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groups, except for the youngest
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.
While
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male
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declined with
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before rising again in the oldest
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, female
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remained relatively stable, with slight fluctuations. In the 15–24
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group
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,
men
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were more physically active than
women
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, with 52.8% compared to 47.7%.
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,
this
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trend reversed in all subsequent
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groups. Among those aged 25–34, the male
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rate dropped sharply to 42.2%,
whereas
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the female rate increased slightly to 48.9%. A similar pattern was seen in the 35–44
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, where only 39.5% of
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exercised regularly compared with 52.5% of
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— the largest gender gap in the chart. For the 45–54 and 55–64
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categories, the female
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rate remained above 50%, at 53.3% and 53% respectively,
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male rates were lower at 43.1% and 45.1%. In the oldest
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(65 and over), the rates for both genders became almost identical, at 47.1% for
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and 46.7% for
men
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men, group, participation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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