IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
two
Use synonyms
 provided pie charts compare the
number
Use synonyms
 of
British
Use synonyms
 university
students
Use synonyms
 in England who have the ability to speak other foreign
languages
Use synonyms
besides
Linking Words
 English in 2000 and 2010
Overall
Linking Words
, it is evident that in 2000 and 2010, approximately one third of
British
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 couldn't speak another language
besides
Linking Words
 their mother tongue,
whereas
Linking Words
 the remaining can speak fluently in German, French, Spanish and other
languages
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, a very small
number
Use synonyms
 of pupils can communicate in
two
Use synonyms
 other dialects. From the figure, it can be inferred that in the first year of the 21st century, about
one fifth
Use the right word
one-fifth
show examples
 of
British
Use synonyms
 university
students
Use synonyms
 lack the ability to speak other
languages
Use synonyms
. The chart
also
Linking Words
 introduced us to the big three
languages
Use synonyms
 spoken by
British
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
, with the most famous lingo being Spanish at 30%,
then
Linking Words
 came French and German at 15% and 10%, respectively. One tenth of the
students
Use synonyms
 speak other
languages
Use synonyms
 , and about 15% are capable of speaking
two
Use synonyms
 foreign dialects. Over the next 10 years, the statistics have fluctuated. Spanish speakers increased by 5%, still the most widely spoken second language among
British
Use synonyms
 university
students
Use synonyms
.
While
Linking Words
 the
number
Use synonyms
 of German speakers stays the same at 10%, the percentage of French speakers has dropped to 10%. The
number
Use synonyms
 of
British
Use synonyms
students
Use synonyms
 who speak exclusively English is
also
Linking Words
 10%.
Therefore
Linking Words
, the
amount
Check wording
number
show examples
 of
students
Use synonyms
 who are able to speak more than
two
Use synonyms
 dialects has increased by 5%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, besides".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, number, british, students, languages with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • language
  • speak
  • speak another language
  • English
  • share
  • proportion
  • percent
  • rise
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • change
  • trend
  • overall
  • year
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • most common
  • least common
  • top language
  • variety
  • different
  • compare
  • in contrast
  • as well as
  • in addition
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • data
  • chart
What to do next:
Look at other essays: