You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter • describe the problem with the equipment • explain what happened when you phoned the shop • say what you would like the manager to do. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing because the cooker I bought from your shop
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week did not work. One problem that I have encountered is the cooker not working. When I tried
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it at home, it did not work. It does not cook rice
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the power supply is fine and nothing is wrong. When I called your shop to complain about the problem to a staff member. They just told me that " we will call you back after checking", but I did not receive any call
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. I would like you to change the cooker
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a new one or give me a full refund. I still have the bill and warranty card. Thank you very much for your attention to
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matter. I hope
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problem can be solved quickly. Sincerely,

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structure
Make each paragraph hold one main idea only. Do not mix many points in the same paragraph.
grammar
Fix small grammar: for example, use 'When I tried to use it' and 'I called your shop and spoke to a staff member.'
coherence
Use clear link words to show the flow, like 'then', 'also', 'however', 'therefore'.
punctuation
Check spelling and punctuation, and use full stops to end sentences.
content
You state the problem and what you want clearly.
tone
The tone is polite for most of the letter.
content
You mention the bill and the warranty, which helps your case.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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