The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
The table illustrates data on
average
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the average
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hours and minutes
spend
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spent
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by British men and women on various daily activities. The units are measured in hours and minutes per day.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen from the table that
the
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apply
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most activity was sleep for both
gender
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genders
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, and
females
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spent more
time
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than males. As
regard
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regards
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leisure
time
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,
male
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males
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spent more
time
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than
females
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, and
the
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apply
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watching TV/DVD and
listen
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listening
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to
radio
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the radio
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/music were the highest
of
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among
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other activities. Looking at the details, we can notice that natural needs were sleep, eating and drinking, resting,
personal
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and personal
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care at 8.04, 1.25,0.43, and 0.40, respectively
for
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, for
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males,
whereas
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for
females
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, they were at 8.18, 1.19, 0.48, and 0.48, respectively. Looking at
second
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the second
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category
that
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, that
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leisure
time
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, it took approximately half of
time
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for the first
category
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category,
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that natural needs
for
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, for
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both genders. The first activity was watching TV/DVD and
listen
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listening
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to
radio
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the radio
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/
music
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music,
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that
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which
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took around
double
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twice
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of
time
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for
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as
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all
others
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other
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leisure
at
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activities at
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2.50 for males and 2.25 for
females
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words females, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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