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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The image illustrates the
production
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 and consumption of
oil
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 barrels per
day
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,
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 in China during the period of 1982 to 2006.
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, there was a significant rise in the consumption of
oil
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 during the
years
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,
while
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 the
production
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does
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 not follow the same progression. In 1982,
chineses
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Chinese
 would use the same quantity of
oil
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 produced, 2
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millions
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million
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barrerls
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barrels
 per
day
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. The quantity consumed remained the same for eight
years
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, when
then
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 occur an increase
to
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occurred to
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 around 3.5
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millions
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million
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 a
day
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 in 1994.
This
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 trend kept happening for the following
years
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, reaching over 6
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millions
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million
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 barrels of
oil
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 consumed daily in 2006 by the
Chineses
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Chinese
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.
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, even though there was an increase in
the
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production
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, it did not follow the same
rise
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proportional rise
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proportion
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. During 1982 to
1986
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1986,
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 the
production
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 growth about one million, yet it
kept
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remained
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 at the same
levels
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level
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 for 8
years
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. In
1994
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1994,
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 there was a
slightly
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slight
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increasement
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increase
 in
the
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production
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, but
up to
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by
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2006
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2006,
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 it still did not reach more than roughly 3.8
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millions
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million
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 a
day
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil, day, years, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil production
  • oil consumption
  • gradual increase
  • surpass
  • overtake
  • reliance on imports
  • disparity
  • steady rise
  • growing gap
  • significant
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