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The chart below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by Canada, UK, USA, and Germany in 2007 in tonnes.

The chart below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by Canada, UK, USA, and Germany in 2007 in tonnes.
The bar graph illustrates the
ammount
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amount
 of
tea
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 and
coffee
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import
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imported
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 by Canada,
UK
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the UK
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,
USA
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the USA
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 and Germany in one year. Obviously, there's the highest imported product is
tea
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and
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, and
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 it
imported
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is imported
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 by
UK
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the UK
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, it is about 13000
tonnes
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. The lowest imported product is
coffee
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by
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from
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UK
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the UK
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and
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, and
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 it
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is equals
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equals
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equal
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with
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to
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 imported
tea
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by
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from
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 Canada
and
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, and
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 they are about 4000
tonnes
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. USA a lot of
tea
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except
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, except
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coffee
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for coffee
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like
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, like
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 the Germany.
However
Linking Words
 USA imported 9000
tonnes
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 of
tea
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 and 7000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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and
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 Germany imported 6000
tonnes
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 of
tea
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 and 5000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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