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The chart below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by Canada, UK, USA, and Germany in 2007 in tonnes.

The chart below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by Canada, UK, USA, and Germany in 2007 in tonnes.
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 the quantity of
tea
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 and coffee
inported
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imported
 by
Canada
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,the UK ,
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USA
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the USA
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 and
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German
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Germany
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 in 2007 in
tones
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tonnes
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 One
stiking
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striking
 point is that
,
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apply
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the amount of
tea
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 and coffee
decrease
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decreases
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 over the entire period.The
higest
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highest
 point of
tea
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 in the UK and the lowest point is in
Canada
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.
usa
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 was the leading importer of coffee.
Linking Words
in
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 contrast,
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german
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Germany
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 recorded the lowest figures for both beverages. Looking more closely
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, theUK
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theUK impoted
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the UK imported
 14000 tonnes of
tea
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which
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, which
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 was almost double
of
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that of
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 the
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usa
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USA
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Canada
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, Canada
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and
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, and
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German
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Germany
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impored
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imported
 smaller quantities
about
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, about
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 400
and500
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and 500
.
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The Usa
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Usa
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USA
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 was the main importer that followed by
Canada
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,the UK
and
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, and
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German
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Germany
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 bought smaller amounts.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, canada, usa, german with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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