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The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The pie chart compares the
type
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types
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 of hobbies among teenagers.
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, many boys preferred sports activities, namely playing basketball, soccer,
skateboarding
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and skateboarding
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,
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 a small portion of girls enjoyed playing netball. In detail, the largest portion was playing computer games among male adolescents, which
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 at 34%, followed by basketball at 26%.
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, only 2 per cent of men read books as a hobby.
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, reading books was
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a secondly
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secondly
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second
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 popular activity among
teenaged
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teenage
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 girls, and the ratio of them was around a fifth of the total. Dancing was the most interesting part for female juniors,
which
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who
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 made
27
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% of participants.
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, listening to music took the smallest portion of the total among
female
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females
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,
which
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 0.1 of the total
was
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being
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 satisfied to do so. In conclusion, the
interest
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interests
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 of
teenager
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teenage
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 boys
was
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were
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in mostly
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mostly in
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 computer games, and
that
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those
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 of girls
was
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were
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 in dancing, followed by reading books.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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