The pie graphs below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie graphs below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie graphs below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides the report of online sales in the retail sector in New Zealand based on four categories
which
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, which
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are
travel
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, film/music, books and clothes. In general, there were trend changes in the online sales sector for the
year
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years
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of
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apply
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2003 and 2013. For the year
2003
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2003,
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people were more excited to buy
travel
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via
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online, where it took the highest score at 36%, the second one was the sales of clothing with the number of 24%,the
less
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least
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popular was film/music at 21% and the least interesting was
book
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books
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at 19%. The trend changed in 2013, people no longer interested in buying
travel
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via
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apply
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online, but they preferred to buy film/music as it was the
best
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best-selling
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online
selling
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apply
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at 33% and
travel
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selling was in the second place at 29%, followed by the selling of books at 22% where there were increased numbers in
this
Linking Words
category. The online selling of clothes decreased
at
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by
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16% as
it
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which
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was the lowest score in that year.

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Linking words: Add some linking words.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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