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Each year, your company gives an Employee of the Year award to a worker who has performed exceptionally well. You believe that someone with whom you work should receive the award this year. Write a letter to your supervisor. In the letter - Describe your colleague’s job at the company - Describe a time you worked with this person - Explain why you believe this person deserves the award

Dear Alicia, I am writing
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 letter to inform you about one of our hardworking employees, Mrs Randi, working in the Production department, as a Team lead. I want to give his name for the Employee of the Year, as I believe she is strong-headed, always completes her work on the given time, and tries to meet the goals or objectives.
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, as a team lead, she handles a group of 15 people and the way she motivates, understands the workers' problems is commendable.
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, she not only follows the rules and regulations of the company but
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 helps the newly hired employees with their tasks. So in my opinion, she is completely suitable for
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 am sure in future she will make extra efforts to maintain the goodwill of the company. Looking forward to hearing a positive response from your side. Yours faithfully Jasmeen kaur

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Job role is clear: Production department and team lead.
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Reasons to award are given: timely work, good team support, help to new staff.
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Closing is polite.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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