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Band 4.5

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing and describe your suitability for this area of work say when you can attend an interview

Dear
sir
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Sir
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,
Iam
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I am
a
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apply
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writting
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writing
this
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 letter regarding the advertisement which you published for
job
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a job
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 in your restaurant. I have
experienced
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apply
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of 3 years
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3 years of
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in
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experience in
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tim hortons
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Tim Hortons
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 as
customer
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a customer
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 service
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representative, in
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, in
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. In
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this
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 my
duities
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duties
are
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include
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 dealing with customers, handling cash ,
manage
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and managing
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 food safety precautions
which
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, which
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 means
i
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I
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 am
sutiable
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suitable
 for
this
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jobs
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job
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.
Beside
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this
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,
i
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I
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 am certified
in
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as
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food
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a food
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 handler
which
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, which
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 supports me to
work
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 in any food company.
Moreover
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,
i
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I
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 can
work
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 in fast
pace
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fast-paced
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 environment with team
mangement
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management
.
Actually
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Actually,
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i
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I
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 shifted recently near to that area where your store is
located
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located,
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 that's why it is easy for me
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to commicate
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commicate
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communicate
to
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with
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work
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 . Before
this
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,
i
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I
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 worked in
down town
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downtown
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which
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, which
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 was too far from my
residental
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residential
 area. I can come for any
face -face
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face-to-face
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 interview whenever your manager
call
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calls
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 me because right now
i
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I
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 do not have any
work
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 .
Iam
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I'm
 waiting to
hearing
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hear
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 your answer
yours
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Yours
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 faithfully.

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content
Plan a clear start. Say you apply for the job, name the shop, and note what you do now.
language
Fix big grammar and word usage. Watch spellings like 'I am', 'duties', 'suitable'.
structure
Use short, calm sentences. Put one idea in each sentence and use two or three short paragraphs.
style
Use a formal tone. A closing line with your name is good.
content
Shows work in customer service and a food trade cert.
content
Mentions interview when asked.
content
Says why you move close to the shop to help with work.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • applying
  • suitable
  • hospitality
  • customer service
  • experience
  • enthusiasm
  • availability
  • communication skills
  • attention to detail
  • teamwork
  • food safety
  • certification
  • interview
  • flexibility
  • ambiance
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