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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The provided bar graph illustrates the top ten
countries
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 for the
production
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 and consumption of
electricity
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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China
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 led the world in both
electricity
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production
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 and consumption for the year 2014. In 2014,
China
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 generated
electricity
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 of 5,398 billion
kWh
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,
whereas
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used
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it used
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majority
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the majority
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 of
his
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its
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production
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 (5,322 billion
kWh
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). Followed by
The
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 United States of America,
who
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which
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 produced 4,099
kWh
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 and consumed 3,866
kWh
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. Total
production
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 made by
USA
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the USA
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 and
China
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,
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were
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 more than the total 8
countries
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made
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. The next country was Russia,
who
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 generated close to one in fourth and one in fifth compared to
China
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 in the reporting year. From the position of four to ten, all
countries
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 made
production
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 and consumption
hovering
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 below 1,000
kWh
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. Germany is the only country
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who
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that
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 used more
electricity
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 than
produced
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it produced
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,
whereas
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 all other nine
countries
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were
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had
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surplus
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a surplus
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 in net position in 2014.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, production, electricity, china, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • top ten countries
  • bar chart
  • data representation
  • significant figures
  • discrepancy
  • outliers
  • comparative analysis
  • resource management
  • energy policy
  • reliant on imports
  • balanced ratio
  • notable trends
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