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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate the import figures from Australia and Japan in New
Zealand
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 over a
period
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 of ten years. In general, imports from Australia finish much higher than they started,
whereas
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 New
Zealand
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 imports from Japan
slightly
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are slightly
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 lower than they started. As can be seen from the graph, the number of imports from Australia gained 4
billion
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 New
Zealand
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 Dollars at the beginning of
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period
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the period
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, and it rose significantly by 2500
million
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 over about 3.5 years.
However
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, it dropped slightly
into
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to
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 5500
million
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. Before it fell back enormously
into
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to
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 3
billion
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 in 1999, it grew slowly by about 250
million
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 in a year before it. Yet in the middle of 2000, it jumped dramatically
into
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to
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 about 7500
million
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.
Furthermore
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, it reduced sharply in
the
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apply
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early
of
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apply
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2002
,
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apply
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into
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to
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 5000
million
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.
Nevertheless
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, it improved steeply
at the end
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 of
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period
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the period
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.
On the other hand
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, New
Zealand
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 import figures from Japan showed a different trend,
whereas
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 it earned 3
billion
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 NZD in 1994, and grew significantly by about 3000
million
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 over 4 years.
However
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, in the
last
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 1998, it slumped
insigficantly
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insignificantly
into
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to
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 4
billion
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. Before it declined hugely into 2000
million
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 NZD
at the end
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 of
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period
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the period
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, it recovered gently for about 6
billion
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 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, period, billion, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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