The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

Overall
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, it’s crucial to mention about common expense rate for all given countries in
Housing
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the Housing
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category,
while
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Japan had
exception
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an exception
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case with
food
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the food
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section.
Last
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but not least
worth
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, worth
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to take
Wrong verb form
taking
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a look health care and clothing placed
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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spending indication

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