The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the information about the usage of fish and several kinds of meat over the two
decads
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decades
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between 1979 and 2004, in European
country
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countries
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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in the early
years
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years,
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beef was the favourite meat compared to other categories.
Then
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people changed their interest and
shift
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shifted
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on
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to
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chicken.
Moreover
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, in 1979, the consumption of beef was 230
gram
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grams
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per week, afterwards it started
declinging
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declining
and reached around 120 grams.
On the other hand
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, chicken increased its ratio with
fiuctuation
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fluctuation
and reached above 250 grams respectively. The
utilization
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of lamb showed
downward
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a downward
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trend from 150 to 70 grams. The
sea food
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seafood
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demonstrate
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demonstrates
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the same trend over the years with
minor
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a minor
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decrease
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of approximetaly
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approximetaly
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approximately
10%. It is
prove
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proven
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that the chicken was the first preference of European
floks
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folks
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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