The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below illustrate the comparison of different types of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005 .
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, Coal had the biggest percentage
this
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whole period, and
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“Other” had the smallest, almost all sectors got bigger coefficients , and all stayed in their places. Another interesting point is that Petro was the only
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that received a lower coefficient,
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other sectors got a higher
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Coal accounted for 29.80% in 1995, and increased to 30.93% in 2005, but still had the highest percentage. Gas occupied 29.63%, and grew to 30.31%
at the end
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of the period. Petro rose to 29.27%, but decreased to a fifth in 2005. The
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“Nuclear” accounted for 6.40% at the beginning of the period, but rose to one in ten.
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“Other” occupied one in twenty in 1995
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after that, it grew to 9.10% in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.
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