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You read an advertisement about in the local newspapers about a discount sale at a particular shop. However, when you meet to buy the goods you wanted, you found the sale had ended. Write to the shop manager. In your letter, -inform him/her where and when you went to the shop -what you felt when you came to know that the sale had ended -demand compensation for the goods you wanted to buy

Dear Sir, I am writing to you to express my dissatisfaction regarding the recent
discount
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 sale
which
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 was no longer available in the
store
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 even though it was advertised
on
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in
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 the Daily Telegraph newspaper on 13th December. I visited the
store
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 located on Pitt
street
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Street
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 in Parramatta on the same day
,
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however
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, upon
arrival
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arrival,
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 I found out that the
discount
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 sale was no longer offered to any customer. I specifically wanted to buy the walking shoes since I tend to walk to work
everyday
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every day
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.I was very delighted seeing the
discount
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 sale
on
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in
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 the newspaper. I felt utterly
disapointed
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disappointed
 and frustrated as I made a special trip to the shop solely to buy the
specally
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specially
 discounted shoes since it happens to be far away from my house.
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, the trip
costed
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cost
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 me $25AUD for the
uber
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Uber
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 ride as there was no direct public transport to the shop. In
the
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apply
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view of
this
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 situation,I kindly request
to
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that to
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organize
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organise
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 appropriate compensation
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such
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, such
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 as a
store
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 voucher or a
discount
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 code for the products I
specially
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especially
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 wanted to buy from your
store
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. I appreciate your assistance in
this
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 matter and look forward to hearing from you. Kind regards Fezwana Tammi

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar errors, for example 'disappointed', 'specially', and 'costed'.
structure
Make each paragraph hold one main idea and use clear links between ideas.
content
Be exact about the compensation you want and how it should be given, such as a store voucher or a code.
accuracy
Check place name, date, and capital letters for accuracy.
content
The letter has a clear aim to complain and ask for compensation.
tone
The tone is polite and formal.
content
It gives the date and place of visit to support the claim.
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