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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people living alone in the United States across five age groups between 1850 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts
demonstartes
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demonstrate
 five groups of
people
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 who lived alone for 200 years. 
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, the percentage of
people
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 who lived alone in age groups 55-64 showed the highest figure for all time,
while
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 the proportions of those
people
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 17-26 increased slightly by the end of time.  In 1850,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
people
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 living alone in
age
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the age
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group
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groups
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 17-26 and 27-36
were
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was
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same
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the same
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, about 2,5%.
By contrast
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,
people
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 in 37-46
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were 3%. By 1900, the
people
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 in 17-26 ages
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; decreased slightly. Regarding
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the ages
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ages
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age groups
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group
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 in 27-36 and 37-46 had
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apply
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similar
figure
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figures
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.
Also
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 in that year
apperead
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appeared
fourth
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the fourth
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group
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 in ages 47-54 with 3,5%.  In 1950,
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a new
group
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 of
people
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55
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aged 55
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-64 who were 9%. Others were
in
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at
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 the same level between 2,5 and 3,5. By
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apply
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2000, younger
people
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 who lived alone were
less
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fewer
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 than older
one
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ones
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. The former were accurately 5%,
while
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 the latter were more than 15%. 
Other
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The Other
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 three groups ranged from 8% to 13%. 

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people,  , group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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