The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
amount
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of
money
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spent by overseas visitors in the UK between 1980 and 2010,
while
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the pie chart compares the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuations, the
amount
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spent continued to increase throughout the whole
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years
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. Again, the highest proportion of the
money
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was used on holidays
and
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the least was spent on visiting friends or relatives.
To begin
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, in 1980, the
amount
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stood at about £8000
million
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,
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the number
then
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declined in the next two
years
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.
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,over the next three
years
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, the
amount
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of
money
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spent by tourists increased steadily to £9000
million
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. 1985 to 1990 witnessed some fluctuations in the
amount
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spent. The number rose significantly and
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a high of £12000
million
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. It dropped to approximately £8000
million
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the
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in the
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following
years
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and
finally
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increased to £10900
million
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in 2006
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however
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it fell slightly to £10600
million
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in the final year . In the pie chart, the most popular activity was holiday
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44.1 % in 1980
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nevertheless
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, it reduced to 39.1% in 2010.
Money
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spent on visiting friends or relatives increased from 18.7% in 1980 to 28.2% in 2010. Business
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on
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the other hand, remained a
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fifth
of the total in both 1980 and 2010. The rest of the
money
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was allocated for other purposes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the tenth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, years, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the tenth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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