The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts illustrate the average proportions of 3 different nutrients found in common meals, which can be harmful to health when consumed in excessive amounts.
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, dinner contains higher amounts of sodium and fat, followed by lunch. Breakfast,
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, recorded a lower ratio in all the categories.
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, snacks account for a bigger percentage with
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to added sugar. In detail, breakfast contains 14% of salt, 16% of saturated fat and 16% of glucose, all of which are the least.
On the other hand
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, lunch recorded 29%, 26% and 19%
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accordingly
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in all the nutrients.
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, meals eaten in the evening are highly salty with a staggering percentage of 43,
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37% of these foods are greasy and
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23% of added
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sugar
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, added sugar is predominantly consumed through snacks, which far exceeds the other meals,
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breakfast contributes the least.

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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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