The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five British cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares five different cities in Australia in terms of citizens' drinking habits. The chart provides information on three types of buying
coffee
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in
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last
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the last
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4
weeks
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.
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, it can be seen that the largest number of people preferred to go to a
cafe
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for drinking in
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last
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the last
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four
weeks
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in Australia.
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is
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,
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figures for individuals who purchased fresh
coffee
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stood at the
least
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lowest
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percantage
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percentage
among
three
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the three
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categories in these five cities. It is obvious that figures for Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart show the same trend.
over
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the period of four
weeks
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, more than 60% of residents
Sydney
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in Sydney
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, Melbourne, and Hobart tended to drink their
coffee
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or tea in a
cafe
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. Second to the most popular way of
driniking
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drinking
,
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Australians
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chose instant
coffee
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during
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last
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the last
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4
weeks
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, with the highest proportion in Hobart at around 55% and the least in Sydney at around 45%.
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However
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figures for Brisbane follow the same trend
,
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;
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it is undeniable that there is a slight
discrepency
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discrepancy
(about one in twenty) between choosing instant
coffee
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and going to a
cafe
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to drink.
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in
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contrast, 50% of people in Adelaide chose ready-made
coffee
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as a first option,
while
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the proportion of
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lovers stood at just under 50%. Totally, during
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4-week survey, in
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city
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city,
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people drank less than
other
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in other
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cities in Australia.
Furthermore
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, it is worth pointing out that the percentage of individuals in
Adeliade
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Adelaide
who bought fresh
coffee
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was exactly the same
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those
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in Brisbane, at just below 35%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, weeks, cafe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Survey results
  • Buying and drinking habits
  • British cities
  • Standout trends
  • Consumption
  • Preference
  • Purchasing trends
  • Retail outlets
  • Freshly brewed
  • Instant coffee
  • Urban preferences
  • Market
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