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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph presents the top ten nations for
the
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electricity
consumption
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 and
production
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 in the year 2014.
Overall
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, the
production
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 rate is
more
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higher than the
consumption
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 number except in Germany. China and
United
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the United
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 States hold the highest
figure
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leaving
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 a huge gap with the rest of the countries. China leads the chart with 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 for
production
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 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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 for
consumption
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,
followe
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followed
 by
United
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 States with 4,099
billion
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kWh
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 for
production
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 and 3,866
billion
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kWh
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 for
consumption
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.
On the contrary
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, Russia
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on
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third place with just 1,057
billion
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kWh
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 for
production
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 and a
slight difference
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 number for the
consumption
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.
Furthermore
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, the rest of the nations only hold below 1,000 million
kWh
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 respectively for
production
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 and
consumption
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, with
production
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holds
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 a higher figure, except for Germany, the
production
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have
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 526,6
billion
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kWh
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 lower than the
consumption
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which
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 has 582,5
billon
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kWh
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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