The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart

illustrate

Correct subject-verb agreement

illustrates

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shares of expenditures for five major categories in four different countries.

Overall

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, Housing was the highest field,

while

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health care experienced the lowest. Housing in

United

Correct article usage

the United

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States showed approximately 26%,

while

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Canada experienced

Change preposition

apply

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housing around 21%

Punctuation problem

. In

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in contrast

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United

Correct article usage

the United

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States was in clothing about 3% and 7%. Food in

United

Correct article usage

the United

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Kingdom was approximately 20%,

while

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Food in Japan showed about 23%.

In contrast

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United

Correct article usage

the United

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Kingdom in health care experienced around 3%,

Canada

Correct word choice

and Canada

show examples

showed nearly 4%.

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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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79 words

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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in local hotel. In their feeback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?