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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portion of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The provided bar chart illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
induviduals
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individuals
 who eat five meals of
fruits
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 and vegetables in a single day the years 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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, both
fruits
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 and veggies
most
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were most
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pooular amothe
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popular among
the
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apply
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females till
2006
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2006,
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then
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 it was slowly declined during the given time period. In detail, in 2001 interest for
fruits
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 and veggies
amoung
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among
the
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apply
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femals
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females
which
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apply
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was
nealy
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nearly
 20
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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people,
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while
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 in 2001 kids
not
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were not
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 into natural products much
which
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, which
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around
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was around
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 12
percent
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per cent
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 of
youngers
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young people
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in
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. In
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 the following year and the next
male
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males
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 and kids interest about
the
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apply
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fruits
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 and veggies
remaind
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remained
 steady
which
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, which
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 was
aroud
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around
 15
percent
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per cent
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in
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apply
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2002 and 2003
moreover
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, in
2004
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2004,
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 both men and
kids
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kids'
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inatke
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interest
of
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in
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 natural meals steadily
incresed
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increased
 to 25 precent after
, in
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. In
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 2007 and
2008
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2008,
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 the interest
of
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in
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 taking 5 meals a day slightly declined to 23
precent
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per cent
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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