The charts below show the proportion of British students at one univercity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

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key information about how many students at one university in England who could speak other
languages
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in addition
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to English in 2000 and 2010. The units are measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the most spoken
languages
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in both years
was
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were
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Spanish
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only.
In addition
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, French and no other
language
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in 2000 were higher than in 2010,
whereas
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Spanish
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and another
language
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were in 2010 higher than
2000
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in 2000
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.
According to
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what is shown, German and two other
languages
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have the same
percentage
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at 10%.
Spanish
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and no other
language
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had
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the highest
percentage
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at 30% and 20% respectively
in
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, in
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2000.French and another
language
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have
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also
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the
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had the
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same
percentage
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at 15% in 2000. In terms of 2010,
Spanish
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and another
language
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have the highest
percentage
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at 35% and 20% respectively.
Moreover
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, Tow other
languages
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, French, Greman and no other
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language
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language,
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have the same
percentage
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at 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, percentage, spanish, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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