The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British scholars in a university who could speak other
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between 2000 and 2010.
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, there were variations in the figures who were able
speak
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to speak
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extra
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.
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, the majority of
students
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were able to speak Spanish
only
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in addition
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in both years. In 2000, the highest proportion of university
students
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were able to communicate only in Spanish, accounting for nearly one-third of the total percentage. Meanwhile, the lowest figure was reported by
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who were able to speak German only and two other
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in the same year, each accounting for 10%.
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, one-fifth of the total
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were unable to communicate
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another language
in addition
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to English in the initial year. In 2010, the majority of the scholars were able to speak only Spanish, accounting for 35% which was three times that
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students
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who were able to talk in German only and two other
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.
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Additionally
, one-fifth of total
students
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were able to speak another language.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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