The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates the rate of passing the driving
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amongst males and females in one Asian nation from 1980 to 2010.
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, percentages of men who cleared the driving
test
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were always lower in every year as
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compared
to women.
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,
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2000, just under 70% of the females
were
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had
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passed their driving exam.
This
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figure was the highest in
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comparison
to other years. After a decade,
this
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trend decreased to some
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extent
, and stood roughly at 65%. Nearly
,
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48% of the females were noticed to pass the driving
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in 1980, and 52% in 1990. In terms of men who passed their driving
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in 2000 and
2010
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2010,
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had
shown
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same
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the same
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percentages
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percentage
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just
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, just
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under 50%. Around 30% and 50% of the males cleared the
test
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in 1980 and
1990
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1990,
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respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words test with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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