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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart above illustrates
comparison
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a comparison
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 who were able to pass
theire
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their
 driving test in an asian country throughout the year(1980-2010).
Overall
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of
women
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 were able to get their
driver
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driver's
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 licenses compared to
men
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 in each
years
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year
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 recorded.
However
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, we can see that the number of
women
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 who passed their driving test
were
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increased dramatically from 1990 to 2000, and
then
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 decreased by about 3
percents
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per cent
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. Meanwhile, in 2000 and 2010,
men
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 population who passed the test remained stable. In conclusion, assuming
men
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 did not have the ability to pass the
tast
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test
 compared to
women
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 is quite acceptable.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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