The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016

The pie charts illustrate different career and academic alternatives taken by High school finishes in Lakeside Country in the years 2010 and 2020.

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idea contributed the least to

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after graduating and going to college was the most essential sector. In comparison,

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of the period, going to college still accounted for the biggest vital part and the lowest contribution was made by working.

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sectors were at 5% and 11%,respectively, and both increased more than fivefold and threefold after a 10-year period. Working (freelance and informal sectors) was 11% in 2010 and experienced a slight growth of 2 in 2020.

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,going to college , which comprised almost half of academic choices in 2010,fell to 38% in 2020. The working sector accounted for 24% of Academic choices in 2010 and experienced a more than twofold decrease to one-tenth in 2020

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