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THE charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts compare the percentage of
water
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 used for three different purposes in six areas of the world. The proportion of industrial
water
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use
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 is highest in Europe, which accounts for 53%. North
America
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 ranks
second,
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with a slightly lower figure of 48%.
In contrast
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, the remaining four
regions
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use
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 significantly less
water
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 for industrial purposes. Among these areas, South East
Asia
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, South
America
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, Africa, and Central
Asia
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 show progressively lower proportions. The pattern for agricultural
water
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use
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 shows the opposite trend. South East
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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, and Africa record the highest proportions of agricultural
water
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 consumption, at 81%, 88%, and 84% respectively. South
America
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 ranks fourth, with a slightly lower figure.
By contrast
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, North
America
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 and Europe have the lowest percentages of agricultural
water
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use
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, at 39% and 32% respectively. Domestic
water
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use
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 does not show significant differences across the six
regions
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, with figures ranging from approximately 7% to 19%.
Overall
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, industrial
water
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use
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 is highest in developed
regions
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such
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 as Europe and North
America
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,
while
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 agricultural
water
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 consumption dominates in Africa, Central
Asia
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, and
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
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. Domestic
water
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use
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 remains relatively low and stable across all
regions
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america, regions, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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