The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the number of British scholars at one university in England who
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speak
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besides
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English in
two
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period
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of time, the
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2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
spanish-speaking
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students
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placed the highest number in both
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,
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those who
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and who communicate in Germany showed the same proportion in both
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. As it is displayed, Spanish-speaking
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and those who
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another
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increased
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5 %, resulting in 35% for
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Spanish
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and 20% for
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by the
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2010.
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it is proven that there
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a decrease in
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different groups. French-speaking
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students
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started with 15% and ended up
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10%
while
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who
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no other language
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the highest decrease by 10%. The other
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category
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-
students
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that
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speak more than
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and German-speaking
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students were
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found steady for both
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,
by placing
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in
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10% of the proportion.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, two, year, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • language
  • speak
  • speak another language
  • English
  • share
  • proportion
  • percent
  • rise
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • change
  • trend
  • overall
  • year
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • most common
  • least common
  • top language
  • variety
  • different
  • compare
  • in contrast
  • as well as
  • in addition
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • data
  • chart
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