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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The chart shows the distribution of different income groups in
cities
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 and regional
centres
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 of Australia. 
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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lower
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the lower
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middle
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 and
middle
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 groups have the highest percentages,
whereas
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the
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The
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 lowest figure in the
Cities
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 low
group
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by
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, by
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contrast
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contrast,
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 in the
Ragional
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Regional
centres
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 high figure is the lowest. In
the
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apply
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detail,
Cities
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middle
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group
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 35%,
lower
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the lower
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middle
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 30%,
high
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the high
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 20%, and
low
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the low
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 approximately 13%
,
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;
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however
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middle
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group
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 is the highest and
low
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the low
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group
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 is the lowest
figure
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apply
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.
Likewise
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,
Regional
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the Regional
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centres
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middle
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group
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 under the 30%,
lower
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the lower
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middle
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group
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 have more percentage over the 30%,
Regional
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the Regional
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centres
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 low income
group
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is have
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has
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 more percentage than
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Cities
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the Cities
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 low
group
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 over the 20%, and
high
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the high
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group
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 15%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, centres, middle, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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