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You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter •tell them when you will be arriving and leaving •explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost •ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel

Dear Manager, I hope
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, as advertised. My name is Dr Hassan, and I hold a Master of Science in Public Health (MSPH) from the University of Karachi, with a GPA of 3.6. I completed my Bachelor of Medicine from Dow Medical College, achieving a GPA of 3.5. Currently, I am working as a General Practitioner at Medical Hub, Karachi.
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 article on pulmonary fibrosis in elderly patients, which has strengthened my interest in
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 and public health. I am particularly interested in
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 Assistant position, as I believe it would be an excellent opportunity to
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 skills and contribute meaningfully to the field of public health. I would be grateful for the opportunity to discuss my application
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Dr Hassan

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task response
Add a short line to show why this job fits you and how you can help the team. Mention the job title again and ask for an interview.
structure
Make a new line for each idea. Start with a short intro, then talk about your studies and work, then your research, and end with a note to meet.
paragraphing
One idea per paragraph. If you have many facts, split them into new paragraphs.
format
Use a clear greeting and closing. For example, 'Dear Hiring Manager' and 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully'.
style
Check spelling and use plain words. Keep sentences short and simple.
content accuracy
The letter gives main facts: degrees, work, and a published study.
motivation
Shows interest in the job and asks for an interview.
tone
Polite and formal tone for a job letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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