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Band 5.5

The given line graph compares the change in prices of three different types of metals namely Copper, Nickel, and Zince in 12 months thoughout 2014

The line chart illustrates the price per
monthly
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month
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 changes in prices of copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014.
Overall
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, copper and zinc showed
stable
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stability
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 in short-term fluctuations. Meanwhile, nickel has a significant decrease over time. In January , the percentage of copper began
2
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at 2
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%, and
thereafter
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 it
has
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apply
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a
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apply
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slightly decreased to 0.5%. In
this
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figure
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figure,
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 it remains stable
to
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until
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 April, but it sharply
decrease
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decreases
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 to -0.5% in
next
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the next
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 month, and
recovered
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recovers
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 to1.5% by the end of the year.
On the other hand
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 , zinc
remain
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remains
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to
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at
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 1%
at
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in
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 January.
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meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 it has a significant increase to 3%
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 it dropped to -1%, but
at the end
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 it soared to 2% in December.
In contrast
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,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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