The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In
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graph, we can
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analyse
and compare the past and the
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future overweight rates in different countries
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over
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decades
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the decades
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. The horizontal axis shows the percentage, and the vertical axis represents the
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that
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each study was
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conducted
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.
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, the graph shows how each
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had a
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significant
rise of overweight
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individuals in
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their population,
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most countries had periods where the percentage
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temporarily
decreased, all of them ended up at least 10% higher than
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where
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they started. The
country
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with the
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highest
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percentage of overweight is
USA
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the USA
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, by ending up with almost 80% of over weight in the
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country
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population overweight
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, almost 50% higher than
Korea
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in Korea
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. Australia was the
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that increased the most thought the
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, by having dramatic changes and rapidly growing
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, going from 35% to 65% in 30
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. Many countries had a lot
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of diferent
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diferent
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different
changes, but one. Canada
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apply
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remained almost the same
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throughout
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the
years
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by increasing only by 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, country with synonyms.
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