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Band 5.5

The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

These pie charts illustrate the percentage of electricity manufacture by fuel
source
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france
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France
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 in
two
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the two
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 years 1990 and 2010.
Ovarall
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Overall
, it can be seen
form
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thses
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these
 graphs
there
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that there
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 was a highly
expanded
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 of nuclear
power
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source
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sources
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 in 2010,
while
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 other
fighures
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figures
 had
been
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decline
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, which means nuclear
power
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 was the majority
source
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had been
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produced. As the graphs show
in
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, in
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1990
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1990,
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 coal and oil recorded the same numbers
28
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, 28
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% which
the
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was the
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 highest percentage in
this
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year
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year,
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 followed by oil 22%.
In contrast
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, hydro
power
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the
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 tiny minority
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source
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source,
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 produced 6%. Regarding
to
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2010,
the
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nuclear
power
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the
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was the
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 greatest
poporation
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proportion
 of production
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, whicb
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whicb
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which
 represented 67%. Meanwhile, coal and oil
fall
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fell
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down
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apply
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to
the
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apply
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13%. The smallest
prodcution
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production
 was hydro
power
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which
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, which
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 recorded 2%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words source, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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