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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The data show the amount of electricity production through fuel sources in France between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, in
1990
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1990,
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 more area was covered by coal and natural gas.
Whereas
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,
oil
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 and nuclear
power
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is fell
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fall
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 under
2nd
Correct article usage
the 2nd
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 highest consumption, and hydropower showed
least
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the least
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.
However
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, in 2010 , mostly area covered by nuclear
power
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Linking Words
along
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, along
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 with
2nd
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the 2nd
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highest
Punctuation problem
highest,
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 was shown in
oil
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 and coal. And
least
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last
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 was seen in natural gas and hydro
power
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. After
analyzing
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analysing
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 the chart, in 1990, electricity production
is
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was
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 done through coal and natural gas with 28% equally, which
is
Verb problem
apply
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dropped
down
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to
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 in
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 with a
greatest
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greater
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 fall of 4% in coal and 13% in
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oil
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natural gas
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, nuclear
power
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 will
increased
Wrong verb form
increase
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 from 17% to 67%
from
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over
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last
Correct article usage
the last
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 10 years, and holds
large
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a large
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 area in 2010,
along with
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 that,
oil
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 will
decreased
Wrong verb form
decrease
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down
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apply
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from 22% to 13%, correspondingly.
In addition
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, hydropower
remain
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remains
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 almost constant with 4% drop over
past
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the past
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 year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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