Write a letter to the customer service department of the company. In your letter: •Explain what product you bought and when •Describe the problems with the product •Say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my disappointment with a product that I purchased from your company. I noticed your company's advertisement on TV regarding the ongoing sale. Remote controlled helicopter was always on my wish list.
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, I ordered it from your website on 5th February and was excited to play with it. My order
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is ABC123DEF. Later that day , the package was delivered
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everything looked great at first. My brother and I decided to test the toy;
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,we unboxed the package and assembled the helicopter as printed on the guide.
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, we believe that we received a defective unit because we were not able to connect the remote controller to the helicopter. We tried replacing the batteries
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we were not able to get the remote running. I do understand that mistakes happen; I
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would greatly
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appreciate
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you could replace
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my current unit with a new one. I
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look forward to ordering more products from your company. Yours faithfully, John Doe

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task response
Explain what you bought and when in a clear way.
task response
Say what you want the company to do with a clear request, like a replacement.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a clear order and use linking words so the letter flows.
coherence and cohesion
Try to have one idea in each paragraph so the letter is easy to read.
tone
Formal tone is good.
content
You give the order id and date.
content
You tell the problem and what you want.
structure
You end with a polite closing.
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