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you and your friend ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occation, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter give details of your visit to the restaurant explain the reason for the celebration say what was good about the food and service.

Dear
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Madam
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, My name is Adam. I visited your restaurant yesterday evening at 7 pm with my few friends. It was a surprisingly great visit to your location , and we experienced the best service and tasted a good meal during that time. In that case, I want to share some good ratings and reviews. Basically, I was invited by my friend who had a birthday , and I was there with a group of my friends.
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 was a special time , and we had great fun together.
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, upon entering the hotel area, we were all pleased by the greetings of the staff and their service. Next to that, I was glad that we had a private area especially allocated for our party. That way, we felt good. I
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 want to inform you about the food and the service we provided.
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, we ordered pizza, which was not only delicious
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 but
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 fresh with toppings.
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, we had cheese pasta, which was again heavenly.
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, all our orders are in time
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 we no longer need to wait for hours.
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, the interior was delightful,
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 sitting place was well maintained and cleaned.
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, I want to
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 I will visit again. Sincerely, Isac

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task response
Be clear in what you visit and what you plan. Tell the big idea of the visit and the plan of talking about food and service in one or two parts.
coherence and cohesion
Break the letter into 2 or 3 short parts. Use simple links like first, also, and finally to join ideas.
tone
Polite tone and kind closing.
content
The letter notes the reason of the visit and the good points about food and service.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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