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Band 4

You recently bought a second-hand car from a company that sells used cars, but the car developed some problems. You have phoned, left messages and sent emails, but you have not heard anything from the company that sold you the car. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter explain the problems you have had in contacting the company, and explain your dissatisfaction describe the problems with the car tell the manager what you want him to do You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir, As a valued customer of your company, "Flicker Dealership Inc.", I am writing to you concerning some issues with the
car
Use synonyms
 that I
have
Verb problem
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bought
last
Linking Words
 month. As I am fully aware of the point that investing in a used
car
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 could raise problems anytime, but what I am disappointed
is with
Correct word order
with is
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 the customer care department of your company. I have not only been calling but
also
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 raising tickets online, leaving emails and text messages for a week
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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yet
Verb problem
have yet
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 to get a hold of anyone from your office, which I find very much undesirable from a
reputated
Correct your spelling
reputable
 business like yours.
Nonetheless
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, here
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 the list
drawbacks
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of drawbacks
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 I am encountering with the
car
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.
Firstly
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, it is the left door lock at the back, which is getting jammed time to time and
making
Verb problem
forcing
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myself
Correct pronoun usage
me
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 to get out of the driving seat to open the door for the passengers.
Secondly
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, the air conditioning is not working
at
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in
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 the appropriate way,
for example
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, it is becoming either too cold or not
enough
Correct word choice
cold enough
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for
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inside.
Lastly
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, I cannot be specific about the origin of the problem
,
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;
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however
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,
everytime
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every time
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 I am turning over, the
car
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 is making a muted
prolonged
Punctuation problem
, prolonged
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 noise. I would
therefore
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requesting
Wrong verb form
request
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 the manager
t0
Correct your spelling
to
 consider arranging a slot soon to fix these problems ,
as well as
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 check the
overall
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 health of the
car
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. I would
also
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 like to get a proper
customers
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customer
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 service and free
car
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 wash
while
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i
Fix capitalization
I
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 am at your workshop, as I have paid for the full insurance premium. I prefer to get a response shortly, Yours
Sincerely
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sincerely
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, Kevin

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task response
Task response: You answered all the asks. Some lines are long. Use short sentences and clearer details.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear paragraphs. Put your start, then the list of car problems, then your ask. Use small linking words like and, but, then.
content
You show all parts: how you tried to call the firm, what is wrong with the car, and what you want now.
purpose
You tell the manager to act fast and show what you want, like a fix and a quick reply.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • second-hand car
  • used cars
  • customer service
  • dissatisfaction
  • contact
  • mechanical problems
  • warning lights
  • dashboard
  • unusual noises
  • refund
  • inspection
  • repair
  • qualified technician
  • resolution
  • frustration
  • multiple methods
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