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The bar graph outlines the percentage of three different means of transportation that the young generation prefer in Great Britain, The USA, Germany and France. Overall, cars are the most popular transport across the four countries, while motorcycles and bicycles are the least preferred option in Great Britain and the USA, respectively. France has the highest percentage of car users, at approximately 75%. In comparison, the USA and Great Britain have fifteen percent less users than France and Germany accounts with two quarters less. Motorcycles are the most common transport in Germany with 45% of users, while in the USA and France, it is just used by 10% and 15% of the young people, respectively. Great Britain accounts for 20% more than the USA: a total of 30%. Great Britain and France have the same percentage of bicycle users: 10%. While Germany’s percentage is just nearly 20%, the USA has 50% more than the percentage of Germany.

The bar graph outlines the
percentage
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 of three different means of transportation that the young generation prefer in Great
Britain
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,
The
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USA
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,
Germany
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 and
France
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.
Overall
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, cars are the most popular transport across the four countries,
while
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 motorcycles and bicycles are the least preferred option in Great
Britain
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 and the
USA
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, respectively.
France
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 has the highest
percentage
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 of car
users
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, at approximately 75%. In comparison, the
USA
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 and Great
Britain
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 have fifteen
percent
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less
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fewer
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users
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 than
France
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 and
Germany
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accounts
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with
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 two quarters less. Motorcycles are the most common transport in
Germany
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with
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 45% of
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,
while
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 in the
USA
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 and
France
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,
it
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is
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used by just
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 10% and 15% of
the
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young people, respectively. Great
Britain
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 accounts for 20% more than the
USA
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: a total of 30%. Great
Britain
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 and
France
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 have the same
percentage
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 of bicycle
users
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: 10%.
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Germany
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’s
percentage
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 is just nearly 20%, the
USA
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 has 50% more than the
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 of
Germany
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, britain, usa, germany, france, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "outlines" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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