The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph displays the proportion of
Australia exporting
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Australia's exports
to four different regions between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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,
Japan
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being
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, being
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the largest importer in the starting
years
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years,
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showed
downward
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a downward
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trend,
whereas
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China
being
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, being
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the lowest region to
export
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export,
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showed a dramatic surge over the years. The most noticeable regions were India and the U.S.
that
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, which
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fluctuated and were nearly close to each other by the end of 2012. In 1990,
Japan
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was the highest importer at over 25, but between 1990 and 1995,
Japan
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decreased sharply and till 2012 showed a constant
change
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level until 2012
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.
However
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, China in 1990
being
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was
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the lowest country to import
presented
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and presented
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drastic
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a drastic
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rise by overtaking
U.S.
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the U.S.
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and
Japan
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and became the highest importer among
the
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apply
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all countries.
Moreover
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, India started with China
,
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and
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remained constant till 2000. After 2000, India climbed up and overtook
U.S.
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the U.S.
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between 2005 and 2010, but in the end was overtaken by
U.S.
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the U.S.
show examples
around 2010 and 2012.
Furthermore
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,
U.S.
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the U.S.
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represented the second largest in 1990, but became the third
country
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largest country
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at the end
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of 2012
while
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showing fluctuation over the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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