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Band 4.5

Many employers find that their new employees lack sufficient interpersonal skills such as lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes? Can you suggest some possible solution

In these
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 days, many new recruits struggle to demonstrate their skills to
work
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as a
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 collaboration with others.
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 issue can
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 to several underlying factors,
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however
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it may be addressed through some approaches. One major cause is that many employers have limited experience
to
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work
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 as a team
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 they
accustomed
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are accustomed
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 to
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work
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 independently.
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, it makes the adaptation more and more challenging and
barry
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hinders
 them
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from being
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 active in team-based events, because
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 it may impact
considerably to
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 their confidence and passion to
work
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. Another contributing factor is definitely
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 role of technologies, relying heavily on digital communications. Many stuff tended to interact through messages and emails rather than face-to-face.
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, they may find it difficult with direct communication and understanding others percpectives during worktime. To tackle these issues,
a
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 position of the companies is really crucial. If they
organize
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organise
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 group projects or something
may
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 involve and engage them, new workers build better
relationship
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relationships
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 with others
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, and
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 it
also
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start
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 to affect their
work
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-efficiency.
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, other employers and
manager
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managers
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also
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 ought to be more communicative and offer
assists
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assistance
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 for them to get along well with them, since
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 it gives them a chance to avoid from independancy and be a trigger to be more passionate about
work
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. The communicative and friendly atmosphere, the more productive workplace. In conclusion, lack of interpersonal skills
are
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 mainly caused by
lack
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a lack
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 of experience
to
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working
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work
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 as a team and overrelying on digital devices.
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, it may
measered
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be measured
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 by the support of
stuff
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staff
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, manager and company.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You explain the causes and solutions, but some ideas are short.
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Use clearer examples. For example, say what kind of team work a new worker may fail to do.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main idea easy to follow. Start one paragraph with causes and one with solutions only.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like because, so, also, and however carefully.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are hard to understand because the words are not in a clear order.
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Develop each point with one extra sentence. This will make your answer stronger and clearer.
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You answer both questions in the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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You give more than one cause and more than one solution.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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