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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

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The
charts
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 above provide key information and comparison between 4 types of known
energy
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production
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 (
Gas
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, Coal , Petro, Nuclear, and others). In
both
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 years 1995 and 2005. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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,
both
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 pie
charts
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 show that Coal is the leading
energy
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production
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.
As well as
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,
Gas
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 comes second with the highest
prouduction
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production
 in
both
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charts
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,
while
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 other unknown
energy
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production
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 is the lowest in the
charts
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, alongside Nuclear. In 1995, Coal had slightly higher
production
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numbers
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 than
Gas
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 (29.80% , 29.63%). Following up, Petro had
rates
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 at 29.27%
minimally
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, minimally
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 close to
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numbers
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the numbers
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 of
both
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 Coal and
Gas
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.
On the other hand
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, Nuclear
out performed
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outperformed
 other anonymous
energys
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energies
 with
rates
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 at 6.40% and 4.90%. In 2005, all
energy
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production
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 performances
standed
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stood
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 out,
raised
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rose
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 to higher
numbers
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.
Both
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 Coal and
Gas
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 upgraded
rates
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 to (30.93% , 30.31%).
In addition
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, Coal still
standed
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stood
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 out with the highest
numbers
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 on the chart.
However
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, Petro had dramatically decreased compared to 1995,
numbers
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 at 19.55%,
while
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 Nuclear
significantlly
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significantly
 increased
production
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rates
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 to 10.10%.
On the other hand
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, other
energy
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production
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rised
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rose
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 to half the
rates
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 in 1995.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, energy, production, gas, both, numbers, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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