The charts below show the percentage of Australian men and women in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

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The bar chart demonstrates the rate of Australian males and
femals
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females
in three age groups that are employed in the years 1984, 2001 and 2014.
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, the age groups 15-19 and 35-44 remained stable,
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the 15-19 proportion decreased.
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the employment of Australians in their 60s had increased over time. The category of operating from 60 to 64 had an upward shift from approximately 40% to 58%, exceeding working teenagers.
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, Australian men were employed the highest in
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of 35 to 44 by about 95%,
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only 5% of women were in the
work-force
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workforce
. The percentage remained constant over the 3 decades. For the male teenagers from 15 to 19, their percentage in working declined by about 8% from 58% in 1984 to 50% in 2001, after being constant for over 20 years. Making males and females equal in the rate of economic activity.

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