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The given line graph compares the proportion of domestic waste recycling in the UK, France and Germany from 2005 to 2015. Overall, the recycling rates in the UK and Germany increased over the period while it actually decreased in France

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The line chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of domestic
waste
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 recycling in three different countries, namely the United Kingdom (
UK
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),
France
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 and
Germany
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, between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of domestic
waste
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 recycling in the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 showed an upward trend ,
while
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France
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 mostly experienced a downward trend.
Moreover
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,
waste
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 recycling in the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 had higher percentages compared to
France
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at the end
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 of the decade.
Initially
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, the
percentage
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 of domestic
waste
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 recycling in the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 increased steadily from 2005 to 2009, by 10% and 5%, respectively. Between 2009 and 2011, the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 rose significantly, accounting for approximately 45% and 55%.
At the end
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 of the time period, the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 reached
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their peaks at 60% and 55%, respectively. After, the
percentage
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 of domestic
waste
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 recycling in
France
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 had the highest share, accounting for 50%, in 2005.
However
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, from 2005 to 2007,
France
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 decreased moderately by a minor 2% difference. Despite the decrease,
France
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 still had the maximum share of domestic
waste
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 recycling in 2007, accounting for 48%.
However
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, between 2007 and 2013,
France
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 experienced a dramatic decline by 18% and became the
last
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.
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, from 2013 to 2015,
France
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 rose significantly at 40%, which is 10% lower than its beginning.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, waste, uk, france, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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