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Situation You recently moved to a new apartment and are having problems with the noise from your neighbors. Write a letter to the building manager. Purpose Complaint letter Bullet points Explain how the noise is affecting your daily life. Describe what kind of noise the neighbors are making. Say what you would like the building manager to do about the situation.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to inform you about an issue I have
with
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had with
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 my
neighbors
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neighbours
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 since I moved to my new apartment. Currently, I am working from home four days per week, and I can't focus on my daily tasks
due to
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 the loud noise my
neighbors
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neighbours
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 make. Everything is interrupted for
this
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. The reason
of
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for
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that is
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 that they have an animal shelter in their house.
Although
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,
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 it is a worthy
labor
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labour
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,and I love the animals, the dogs bark the whole day because they
keep
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are left
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 alone
the
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for
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 most
part
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of the day. I would like to request you talk with them and explain that the apartment is not an
appropiate
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appropriate
 place to
rescued
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 animals. My solution for
this
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,
If
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if
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 they want,
it
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apply
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 is
take
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to take
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 the rescues to a house I have in the countryside. I look forward to your response. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully. Laura Leyva

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task response
Task response: You answer all three points, but some ideas need more detail.
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Task response: Say more clearly how the noise affects your work and rest each day.
task response
Task response: The tone is mostly polite, but some lines sound a bit direct. Use a softer way to ask.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some sentences do not link well.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like because, so, and also.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each part to make it clearer.
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Task response: You cover the problem, the kind of noise, and what you want the manager to do.
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Task response: The letter has a clear purpose from the start.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, middle, and ending.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are right for a formal letter.
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