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Band 4

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in locals newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter Explain what you are currently sowing Describe your suitability for this area of work Say when you can attend an interview

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Dear restaurant manager.
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 am interested you placed an adviretisement for waiters position. My name is
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Mani,
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 born and raised in Mongolia. About my experience i have worked in Biggest mongolian sushi restaurant called Billy sushi
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 10 years.
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 i have moved to Chicago
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 week . Luckily i saw your ad on newspaper. Im fast handed,
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 learner, well experienced waitress. Please let me know when
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 can attend
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the interview
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. Mani 0433440514

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task response
Say all parts of the task in a clear way. Tell what you do now, why you are good for the job, and when you can come.
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Use a more polite tone. For example, say 'I am writing to apply for the job' and 'I would be happy to attend an interview.'
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in one paragraph. This will make your letter easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'because', and 'so'.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear ending such as 'I look forward to hearing from you.'
task response
You answered the main task and said you want the job.
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You gave work experience from a sushi restaurant.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a greeting and a closing with your name and phone number.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas are in a simple order: job, experience, skills, interview.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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