The diagram below shows the transport preferences among young people in Great Britain, the USA, Germany and France in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparissons where necessary.

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The
bart char
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bar chart
illustrates transport
diferences
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differences
about young people from different regions,
that
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which
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are
USA
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the USA
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, Great
britain
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Britain
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, Germany and France. On the one hand, cars are
the
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apply
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popular
ones
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apply
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. Except for Germany
that
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, where
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bikes
dominates
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dominate
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, but cars are reaching bikes.
On the other hand
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, motorcycles have a low percentage in all the countries.
USA
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The USA
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dominates with a big difference, but it's still a low percentage.
Then
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Germanyis
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Germany is
second
and
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, and
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Great
britain
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Britain
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and France are the lower percentages. The most popular transport
are
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is
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cars,
then
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bikes
and
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, and
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the lower
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lastly
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with
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, with
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a big difference is motorcycles.
To conclude
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, all the transports are
usefull
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useful
, but one is
most
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more
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popular that others
depending
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, depending
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on the countries.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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