The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

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The
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chart above shows the
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of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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, orange was the middle
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among all three of them. The blue
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had the highest
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. Green was and left with the smallest
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among these three bars. Another interesting point is that all of them stayed in their starter positions, and none of them occupied different positions. The
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called “Men” accounted for 17% at the beginning of the period, and stayed the same in 2002 and 2003, respectively.
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it rose
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to 22% in 2004, it
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grew to 24% in 2005. After 2005, it didn’t stop growing and increased to 28% on the next year, but stayed the same in 2007.
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of the orange
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fell to 27%
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of the period. The blue
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regarded for 21% in 2001, and increased to 24% and 27% in 2002 and 2003, respectively. In 2004 it grew
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to 30%, and in the next year rose as well to 32%.
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shot up to 35%, which is the highest
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among all three bars. Unfortunately, it decreased to 31% in 2007 and back to the former
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30% in 2008. The
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called “Children” occupied 12% at the beginning and stayed the same until 2003, but
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grew to 17% in 2004. In the next year
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became higher by one per cent, but in 2006 it rose to 24% in 2006.
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the
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increased to 26% in 2007, and decreased to 24% in 2008.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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