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The graphs below show the percentage of world's forests and the percentage of world's timber production in different regions of the world.

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The line graph
provide
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provides
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 information about the forests around the
world
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world,
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coupled with
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this
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apply
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the amount of timber production in various regions of the globe.
Overall
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, it can be seen that percentages in Russia in both charts were dominant,
while
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 European countries had the lowest
per cent
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percentage
.
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 the
data
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data,
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it is clear that
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 in 2010 Russia and South America
were
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had
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 the highest rates among other countries, both of them encountered more than 20% (24.2% and 20.5%). Percentages in North America
has
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have
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 slightly fluctuated
in contrast
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 with record holders.
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, Asia and Oceania had a tiny fraction,
while
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 South Africa has relatively
same
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the same
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 proportions
accounting
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, accounting
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 for 13.2%.
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, in terms of timber
production
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production,
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 Russia had the record rate among other towns in 2010; it made up 37.5%.
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, Europe had the lowest share of
proportion in
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production, making up only 9.2%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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